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Lol 
This is some song lyrics I wrote, the last part is the chorus. Tell me what you think.
Stumbling through the darkness all alone
A failing flower burning in the sun,
A faded grace with no where left to run,
Falling further from your home,
We all know where you belong.
Running circles in your mind,
You feel that there was something you could've done,
But now its gone, and who can remember all the battles won.
The night draws ever closer, and its such a stupid game.
You're reeling,
Being drawn closer by the loneliness you feel.
You're falling,
Never really knowing what is fake and what is real.
They told you not to give up hope,
But you have none left to give.
If you live another day,
Surely it will all be better...
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Celestial Phoenix
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| Posted: Fri Sep 10, 2004 1:14 am Post subject: |
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I've made a short poem back in Junior High that was about jewels. The poem was so popular that the teachers gave me the nickname, Sapphire. Sorry, but I cannot remember it.
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Betaku
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| Posted: Fri Sep 10, 2004 1:19 am Post subject: |
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| caramelpopcorn wrote: | XD XD XD
There once was a guy named oblique
Who wrote limericks that were quite unique
The last one was odd
About me, the mod
But I think it was magnifique.  |
Wow! That one was awesome. Nicely done Caramel. ^^
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caramelpopcorn
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| Posted: Fri Sep 10, 2004 1:30 am Post subject: |
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There once was a guy named Betaku.
I want to tell him "Thank you". 
He liked my little rhyme
Which took me some time
And he writes good poems, too.
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Celestial Phoenix
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| Posted: Fri Sep 10, 2004 1:46 am Post subject: |
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Somehow, that reminds me of rap. 
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Mirage
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| Posted: Fri Sep 10, 2004 11:46 pm Post subject: |
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heres a new poem i wrote uh... 3 days ago? or was it 2? i dont remember. haha.
Pain
I remember vaguely
the pain that I suffered.
You do remember that day dont you?
It was you who caused this pain.
I was laying on my bed
crying my eyes out.
The pain in the stomach.
It wouldnt go away.
But it was easy for you to go.
It was so simple...
Leaving me here...
In pain...
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Celestial Phoenix
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| Posted: Sat Sep 11, 2004 12:08 am Post subject: |
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Artist and a poet. You're a girl with many talents already, Mirage. Good work. 
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Hero of courage
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| Posted: Sat Sep 11, 2004 1:11 am Post subject: |
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Precious jewel
Gracefully shining like a rain of diamonds
You’re kindness could purify a thousand demons
Eyes like a sapphire
To make me love, it has the power
Lips like red as a ruby
Which I desire to kiss for eternity
Heart as pure as a crystal
Making mine festal
Like the most precious of jewels, you are worth infinity
Which is why I want to possess you entirely.
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Betaku
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| Posted: Sat Sep 11, 2004 1:24 am Post subject: |
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hehe...I am the owner of the titleless poems. ^^
Why must I always feel this pain inside?
I don't know what it's from.
Is this what love really feels like?
Or just my cry of lonliness?
I'm not sure what this feeling is...
All I know is that it's because of you.
I have these feelings that I can't explain.
They flutter deep inside.
But as long as I know you are with me,
They seem fade and die.
Yup yup yup...another horrible poem by meh. ^^
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Celestial Phoenix
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| Posted: Sat Sep 11, 2004 1:26 am Post subject: |
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| Hero_of_Courage wrote: | Precious jewel
Gracefully shining like a rain of diamonds
You’re kindness could purify a thousand demons
Eyes like a sapphire
To make me love, it has the power
Lips like red as a ruby
Which I desire to kiss for eternity
Heart as pure as a crystal
Making mine festal
Like the most precious of jewels, you are worth infinity
Which is why I want to possess you entirely. |
Uh-huh...very similar to mine, Hero. My poem's a lot shorter though.
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Mirage
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| Posted: Sat Sep 11, 2004 1:27 am Post subject: |
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actually both Heros and Betakus i must say, they were written with great passion. ^^ its great!!! ^^
Lonely
Stuck here,
alone and cold,
I wait for the day
that you will find me.
My lonely soul cries,
cries for you.
Come back....
Come back to me
and never make me lonely...
again....
i must say this one is a bit choppy but yeah. haha
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Cruxis_Seraph
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| Betaku wrote: | hehe...I am the owner of the titleless poems. ^^
Why must I always feel this pain inside?
I don't know what it's from.
Is this what love really feels like?
Or just my cry of lonliness?
I'm not sure what this feeling is...
All I know is that it's because of you.
I have these feelings that I can't explain.
They flutter deep inside.
But as long as I know you are with me,
They seem fade and die.
Yup yup yup...another horrible poem by meh. ^^ |
Urgh, it reminds me of my non-existant love life. That means it's really good!
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Morwen Laicoriel
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^______^ Aw, Hero, your poems are always so great.
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Nali
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Well, because of Kuri, I now have to post 3 poems that I have...THANKS ALOT KURI!
EDIT: Kuri, you never said I couldn't edit my post and delete them
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Kuri
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w00t!! cool frog! errr.. luc!
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